| Author | Message | ||
| Christopher T George
Advanced Member Username: chrisgeorge Post Number: 1345 Registered: 12-2004 |
Hi all Here is a new form that I am pioneering that grew directly out of our Wild Poetry Forum cinquain train further down the board in the community action section. The form comprises writing a number of linked cinquains, i.e., regularly structured cinquains of 2, 4, 6, 8, 2 syllables but that instead are patterned as 2, 4, 6, 8, 2, 4, 6, 8, 2, 4, 6, 8, 2, for as many links as you need, as follows-- Reunion For Gary Blankenship My heart, re-examined with each recollection from my past: all of my past loves and griefs I revisit every family reunion; greet the living and grieve for those of us now dead, relatives loved; their bodies may be gone but souls remain, forever in our lives. Here with us now, they sit, visit with us at times like this. Christopher T. George Editor, Desert Moon Review http://www.desertmoonreview.com/ http://chrisgeorge.netpublish.net/ http://www.actorssceneunseen.com/ripper.asp | ||
| Denis M. Garrison
Advanced Member Username: denismgarrison Post Number: 271 Registered: 01-2005 |
Chris, This is an interesting idea for a nonce form. It expands the content substantially, which is a plus. On the other hand, the L4 turn of a cinquain is lost by making L5(s) ongoing linking lines. I assume there is no iambic base. That leaves the rhopalic (club-shaped) aspect of the form and the effective use of line breaks as the primary effects of the linkain. I am finding the line break as the major aspect of the cinqku to be very useful, so, surely it can be useful here also. I suppose resonant connections between/among the short lines could also be useful. Is this meant for collaborative verse? bw, Denis www.dmgar.com My books are available at www.lulu.com/denismgarrison | ||
| Dale McLain
Advanced Member Username: sparklingseas Post Number: 901 Registered: 11-2004 |
Denis~ I have no idea what you said, but I love all those big poet-y words!  I'm off to enroll in poetry 101. grins~dale (aka- a heathen) | ||
| James Louros
Member Username: punkikk Post Number: 99 Registered: 03-2004 |
this poem reminds me to remember and care for all the special people in my life. :-] cool -j michael | ||
| Christopher T George
Advanced Member Username: chrisgeorge Post Number: 1349 Registered: 12-2004 |
Thanks, James! Chris Editor, Desert Moon Review http://www.desertmoonreview.com/ http://chrisgeorge.netpublish.net/ http://www.actorssceneunseen.com/ripper.asp | ||
| Christopher T George
Advanced Member Username: chrisgeorge Post Number: 1350 Registered: 12-2004 |
Hi Denis No, this particular poem is meant to be a one-of-a-kind, though we could no doubt start a linkain train in the community action section if we so wished. I appreciate what you are saying that the L4 turn of a cinquain is lost by making L5(s) ongoing linking lines. You are correct that as devised there is no iambic base. As in a cinquain, the form relies on the effective use of line breaks. One commentator elsewhere noted in regard to this example of a linkain, "the strength lies in the 2 syllable lines ... my heart, and griefs, and grieve, remain." Another critter wrote: "this works as a poem, regardless of its form. And I like the form. I often will limit my self with syllable counts if I am struggling to discipline a passionate thought into poetry. It strikes me that this would be an excellent form to use for such purposes." All my best Chris Editor, Desert Moon Review http://www.desertmoonreview.com/ http://chrisgeorge.netpublish.net/ http://www.actorssceneunseen.com/ripper.asp | ||
| Kathy Paupore
Advanced Member Username: kathy Post Number: 2097 Registered: 12-2003 |
Chris, an interesting idea. Here's what speaks to me in this piece: My heart and griefs I revisit and grieve remain like this.  K | ||
| Denis M. Garrison
Advanced Member Username: denismgarrison Post Number: 280 Registered: 01-2005 |
Chris, Thanks for the elucidation. I agree that line breaks can be the defining technique of a form (after all, they are for free verse, the largest category of modern English verse). In the linkain, the line breaks militate the repeating rhopalic form, which the American cinquain has proven to have great effect. Adherence to form forces innovative phraseology. The extraordinarily short lines (2 syllables) gain power by isolation, an ancient and effective technique. What's not to like about the linkain? Well done. Since the form is a repeating shape, perhaps it should be named for the form it creates, something like a panpipe (aka panflute, syrinx, quills) or seawave... bw, Denis www.dmgar.com My books are available at www.lulu.com/denismgarrison | ||
| Christopher T George
Advanced Member Username: chrisgeorge Post Number: 1359 Registered: 12-2004 |
Hi Kathy and Denis Thank you both. Actually you give me an idea, Denis, perhaps a linkain on the panflute will be my next in the form. All my best Chris Editor, Desert Moon Review http://www.desertmoonreview.com/ http://chrisgeorge.netpublish.net/ http://www.actorssceneunseen.com/ripper.asp | ||
| Bren
Advanced Member Username: bren Post Number: 936 Registered: 12-2001 |
Hi Christopher, I like this but I know I couldn't get past the first two to write one myself. I'm too ADD but I like yours and I like what Kathy mentioned. You have captured what reunions and grieving are all about. Good write. : ) Bren | ||
| Christopher T George
Advanced Member Username: chrisgeorge Post Number: 1365 Registered: 12-2004 |
Thanks, Bren! Editor, Desert Moon Review http://www.desertmoonreview.com/ http://chrisgeorge.netpublish.net/ http://www.actorssceneunseen.com/ripper.asp | ||
| Gary Blankenship
Senior Member Username: garyb Post Number: 4170 Registered: 07-2001 |
Chris, a good variation on the crown cinquain form, though I probably would not call it new. You've done 2 4 6 8 2 4 6 8 2 4 etc. I actually prefer the extra 2 staying for 2 4 6 8 2 2 4 etc or a reverse for 2 4 6 8 2 8 6 4 2 4 etc. And thanks much for the deditcation. Gary Drop in read the new MindFire, 2005's first Go in through http://www.mindfirerenew.com/ to get to the issue in a click or two. | ||
| Christopher T George
Advanced Member Username: chrisgeorge Post Number: 1377 Registered: 12-2004 |
Thanks, Gary. Chris Editor, Desert Moon Review http://www.desertmoonreview.com/ http://chrisgeorge.netpublish.net/ http://www.actorssceneunseen.com/ripper.asp |
